Alright Simone. Pushing myself despite a terribly depressed mood to read some writing/critique related stuff to try and restart the creative circuits--something has to work, so why not The Contract? I like this little official entry point/teaser you've set up between the two female principals. I like their gal-pal banter. Stephanie's not the shrinking violent that Jocelyne was in "Painting Stripes." Clearly a worldly, sensual woman comfortable in her own skin, not needing the initiatory experience Jocelyne needed (no worries about this being a retread--you're opening on a different angle), who's been around the block (and lots of other places!)--with Dianna on lots of ways, and she knows for a fact she's being used as a trophy wife. She's a sex enthusiast who wants to learn more and loosen up Alan, not get him to pay more attention to her. Right out of the gate, this isn't shaping up to be a depressing story--kinky yes, and dark, but in a thrilling way which will lead to new vistas of fulfilling discovery. Plus you've got a cast of sophisticated, intelligent, well-heeled characters here--ideal BDSM players! Ready to rock with this bunch--nice jump-off!
Thanks John. I originally wrote this a a prompt/character sketch just for my reference as I write the story. But then I thought the reader needed to know a little about the characters' motivations. It also gives a succinct starting image of the main protagonists rather than having to add too much backstory to the first episodes so I published it as a teaser/prologue.
A great decision to put this up at the front to contextualize the piece as a whole. The initial teaser was great, but I'm glad to see you made it into "The Signing." With the brief hints you provide here, you bring the fantastic into the real world. Had this still been the opener, you wouldn't have lost anything--there would still be the dreamlike, "bolt from the blue" vibe of disorientation (which is what makes vehicles like this so much fun), but it cements the overall tale within the realm of the real, rather than this just being the fever dream of an overworked, kink-obsessed lawyer.
Alright Simone. Pushing myself despite a terribly depressed mood to read some writing/critique related stuff to try and restart the creative circuits--something has to work, so why not The Contract? I like this little official entry point/teaser you've set up between the two female principals. I like their gal-pal banter. Stephanie's not the shrinking violent that Jocelyne was in "Painting Stripes." Clearly a worldly, sensual woman comfortable in her own skin, not needing the initiatory experience Jocelyne needed (no worries about this being a retread--you're opening on a different angle), who's been around the block (and lots of other places!)--with Dianna on lots of ways, and she knows for a fact she's being used as a trophy wife. She's a sex enthusiast who wants to learn more and loosen up Alan, not get him to pay more attention to her. Right out of the gate, this isn't shaping up to be a depressing story--kinky yes, and dark, but in a thrilling way which will lead to new vistas of fulfilling discovery. Plus you've got a cast of sophisticated, intelligent, well-heeled characters here--ideal BDSM players! Ready to rock with this bunch--nice jump-off!
Thanks John. I originally wrote this a a prompt/character sketch just for my reference as I write the story. But then I thought the reader needed to know a little about the characters' motivations. It also gives a succinct starting image of the main protagonists rather than having to add too much backstory to the first episodes so I published it as a teaser/prologue.
A great decision to put this up at the front to contextualize the piece as a whole. The initial teaser was great, but I'm glad to see you made it into "The Signing." With the brief hints you provide here, you bring the fantastic into the real world. Had this still been the opener, you wouldn't have lost anything--there would still be the dreamlike, "bolt from the blue" vibe of disorientation (which is what makes vehicles like this so much fun), but it cements the overall tale within the realm of the real, rather than this just being the fever dream of an overworked, kink-obsessed lawyer.